Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Several professors think that the best time that young children should start to learn other languages are primary
school
rather than secondary
school
. From my point of view, there are many benefits
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more than drawbacks. Presently, many parents want to give their children learn foreign languages at secondary
school
.
However
, experts say students should
study
at primary
school
, but there are
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little drawbacks too because several people think that learners should
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study
when they are older.
For example
, young people who learn languages when they young, they will not have much time to spend with their family and they can not do like kids
such
as play toys and go to
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layground. If they learn early, they will unhappy and not enjoy
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their life, so parents should think about their
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.
On the other hand
, more and more people argue that advantages are greater because when children
study
at primary academies, they can
study
and improve somethings in a short
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. Instance, kids who learn foreign languages like Korean, Japanese and English languages. They can understand and remember
everythings
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everything
such
as cultures, vocabularies, gramma and foods.
However
, if they
study
at secondary
school
, they can not remember
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much.
Thus
, more and more parents should spend money
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education when young people learn at primary
school
. To sum up, experts believe that primary
school
is the best time that children should begin
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about foreign languages more than secondary
school
and I think that kids become to
study
more languages have a lot of benefits than drawbacks.
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