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The high sales of consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the reals needs of the society in which the goods are sold. Do you agree or diasgree with the given statement?

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Advertising is the greatest source nowadays to spread awareness among people. It has more impact on individuals, rather than buying actual needs people end up buying things which are popular in
advertisement
 and trendy. I agree with
this
 statement to a great extent.
Firstly
, wholesale and retailers start doing advertising of their
product
 by making banners, flyers Television
advertisement
, social applications or sometimes marketing of
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the
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roduct in
c
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rowded place.
Furthermore
, people get more attracted to the
advertisement
 when their favourite sportsmen or actors do the marketing of a particular brand. For illustration, a famous female film start giving
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dvertisement for a hair
product
, it will create more impact on girls as they are following the famous personalities and not their actual needs.
Secondly
,
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ompany increases their sales by doing free demo sessions where they showcase their
product
 and attract people by short films, explaining the advantages of the
product
 by catchy lines and it usually convinces people to buy it.
For example
, a person decided to buy a normal mobile phone but in between
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he saw advertising of smartphones, as well as, at a shop the sales department convince him to buy the latest phone by giving him the detailed perks of
product
 and offers,
thus
 a person
end
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 up buying
smartphonephone
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smartphone phone
instead
 of the normal phone just because of advertising and marketing. In conclusion, there is no denying that advertising making people aware of new things, brands and
product
 but these ads have a major influence on people and they buy it apart from their real needs.
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