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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this and how can this problem be solved?

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Nowadays, overpopulation in the cities has become the most significant issue across the globe to be discussed in a precisely way.
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, there are several different causes behind
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 and various effective approaches to overcome
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 issue.
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 of all, it is happening due to lack of opportunity in the
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 areas for the desired jobs.
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, people are more into urban lifestle as it has more development rate and has every possible facilities for humanbeings to make their live's easy.
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, country side areas does not have that much luxurious and modern facilities. There was a survey conducted by Australian University with people who shifted from
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 to urban areas of the Australia. The study revealed that there was several reasons for them to leave the area
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 as : lack of good jobs, undevelopment, not having good infrastructure and many more. Anyhow, there is a solution to every
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. So, to tackle
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, the govrnment should start developing rural areas and helping them to establish modern infrastrucure. Not only
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, the government should create adequate amount of rural jobs so that people can easily move in
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 areas. In my conclusion, I would like to state that
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 can be soved by taking appropriate measures and educating citizens.
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, the government should start new
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 projects which should have tedency to attract the civilians to choose
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 lifestyle as lot of people want to live in
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 areas but they choose not to live as mentioned above.
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