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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now folks are very free to do their professional tasks and they can abide everywhere because of the interaction, technical aspects and conveyance management improvement. From my perspective, there are many merits compare to its demerits and
this
 useful sides obviously exceed its harmful effects. One of the positive of developing
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communication is to lessen the
time
 of a human. Recently, people have to engage
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many types of tasks.
In other words
, there are a
lot
 of variations in their works at the same
time
. Getting
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free
access
 in their tasks enable them to create innovative ideas. The improvement of the technology systems
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diversity in his workplace. Not only that it may
also
 encourage him to implement a new idea where he can put it in his innovative tasks.
For instance
, once an employee did his official tasks by only pen and paper and their working criteria was restricted
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 that
time
. Inventing online technologies it can start to give
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rivilege. When it is beginning to develop it can
also
 reduce the
time
 where people get relief from their hassle. To demonstrate the above statements, it has a
lot
 of useful effects than its negative aspects. Another advantage is that it can widen the travel
access
 of the folks. Once, persons were limited in their travel issues. It took a
lot
 of
time
 where they would travel. Inventing new things it would start to reduce the period and when it was developed it provides a
lot
 of facilities which is now a fruitful effect of person lifestyles.
Firstly
, travelling is so fast that
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people can do a multitask job in their daytime.
For example
, improvement in technologies provides them to
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nternet where ever they go. It gives them
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free
access
 when a person makes a journey by bus or train and uses his laptop while there is no internet
access
. Here, technology provides them
a
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 database online
access
 which is useful to them. To illustrate from the upper opinion, it has
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plenty of advantages which crosses its disadvantages. In conclusion, there is no other option of the technology, online communication and digital Transportation systems. Obviously, it has a
lot
 of useful aspects which overcomes its disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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