Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion

In recent years, it is often suggested that professional physical game players have become ideals for young ones, whereas others argue that they have been not. In

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essay, I will elaborate on both aspects of it but personally, I agree that the benefits of physical athletes’ influences for children that these players include abilities

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as perfect self-managed and following timetable exactly

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outweigh the apparent adverse impacts of them.

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epresentative argument of professional athletes’ incompetence for young people's mental health. More importantly, not every athletes’ behaviours are always being right.

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, they sometimes have been controversial around

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orld by dishonesty sportsmanship.

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, relying on toxic pills which could improve their abilities more than they could and they sometimes fought with the public, using their physical prevailing skills.

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, if young ones have

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that one winner won the game using improper methods like as mentioned above examples, it will not

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for minor’s mental. On contrary,

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, there are several merits of physical game players as I am in

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, these athletes know beneficial tips for controlling their time and self-managed so they will be appropriate teachers for young people for explaining those tips.

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, when they illustrate various stories which involved successful winning games or struggling sometimes but overcoming plots, these success myths will absolutely impress for young’s motivation.

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, it is positive to utilize physical athletes by people, especially schools and parents, for improving young people’s motivation. In conclusion, as stated above, professional players,

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improper athletes, are more likely to have advantages for young people.

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, I claim that parents and relevant educational institutes cooperate to hire athletes in the specific seminars which could become chances for children having appropriate encouragement