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Some people believe that society should be based on rules and laws. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #society #rules #laws
The given bar diagram illustrates how the valuation of the
house
 changed
during
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 1990 to 2002 in comparison to the
house
 prices in 1989. Overall, Frankfurt was the only city where the cost of the houses
have
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 decreased over the given time frame. And the maximum fluctuation in the
house
 worth was seen in London. During 1990-1995, New York, Tokyo and London experienced
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negative growth of 5-7% in terms of the
house
 prices compared with their average
house
 rates in 1989.
However
, in Madrid and Frankfurt purchase value of the houses increased around 2-3%. In terms of the
house
 rates in 1996-2002, London was the only city where the
house
 rates were still 5% lower than the 1989 rates despite a rise in
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ost of approximately 2%. And Frankfurt was the only city where
house
 rates have declined as compared to the rates during 1990-1995.
On the other hand
, New York, Madrid and Tokyo experienced a 10%, 2-3% and 17-19% increase in the
house
 worth respectively.
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