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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

#college #cafeteria #lunchtime #improvements #magazine
Dear sir, I am Kailash kamble studying
in
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2nd-year civil engineering. I am writing
this
 letter regarding
college
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 cafeteria facility because I am using
this
 facility
since
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last
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 2 years along with my two best friends. We spend more time in a
college
 canteen for
food
 because we don't have another choice. The cafeteria area is very interesting and attractive along with light background music and Warm wall colours along with cartoons and caricatures
makes
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 it more and more engaging. It is appealing for
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 young generation. Cleanliness and prompt service
is
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also
 impressive.
However
,
food
 quality is not that great in the terms of teste and quantity. Many students raise
this
 issue regularly in
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 book but
still
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 there is no improvement.
College
 Course fees along with hostel charges
is
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 expensive for many students
hence
 improvement in a system really help them at a great level. I will
thankful
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 to you if you can solve
this
 issue on priority by publishing
this
 review information in a magazine. I
no
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their
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 are different people from
a
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different
culture
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 around the world at one place but
atleast
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at least
food
 quantity issue could be solved. We spend more time in a
college
 canteen for
food
 because we don't have another choice. The cafeteria area is very interesting and attractive along with light background music and Warm wall colours along with cartoons and caricatures
makes
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 it more and more engaging. It is appealing for
a
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the
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 young generation. Cleanliness and prompt service
is
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also
 impressive. Look forward to positive improvement. Your's faithfully, Kailash Kamble
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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