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Nowadays different language soft wares are available that restrict the people to learn foreign languages. Learning a new language is important or it’s ok to use the technology for it.

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 is the most important tool in human civilization to learn about any aspect of the culture. With the advancement in technology, these days different
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 software is available in the market that restricts people to learn foreign languages. I believe using modern technology in every aspect of life is useful
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 learning a foreign
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 has far more advantages. Learning a foreign
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 has numerous advantages. Being
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bilingual or multilingual has an unprecedented impact on the employment prospectus.
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 organizations are operating across the countries in
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 interconnected and interdependent world and their requirement is the proficiency in the foreign languages.
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 In the projects of China Pakistan Economic Corridor, opportunities are given to those having command on Urdu, English and Chinese
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bilingual or multilingual. Learning a foreign
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 break the ice of learning about a foreign culture and traditions. It provides a lot of assistance to any person travelling
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 the globe as he can be much more interactive with natives.
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 that, learning a foreign
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 boost
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mental
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 as it allows a person to evaluate the problems logically and critically.
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some research suggests that bilingual people
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 from 10-25 have a brighter chance to excel in life that those who don’t possess
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 quality. On the other side of the picture, modern technology is breaking the shackles in the field of learning. Many people cannot learn
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 due to some uncongenial circumstances. So the development of different
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 software should not be discouraged. We can draw the conclusion from the arguments that
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 different
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 available but learning a foreign
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 should always be the
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 priority and
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practice
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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