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You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there. In your letter, Ask them for help finding accommodation Tell them where you would like to live Tell them the type of place you are looking for

#move #city #work #people #accommodation #type #place
Dear Scott, How are you
my
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 friend? Hope you are doing well. What about Susan and James? It has been a long time since we met. As you know I will move to your city to work after 1 month. I would like to know if you can help me to find out accommodation. Since
,
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 I am looking for
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one-bedroom
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one
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a one
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 bedroom flat rather than a house with
independent
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an independent
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 bathroom.
Similaraly
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Similarly
, I do not
wants
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 to share a kitchen area with anybody. My main focus is on
town
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the town
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 side or if possible a location near to my workplace. As you know, I am looking for
small
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a small
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 and economical flat near to any park which will be helpful for my fitness. In a new place like
this
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,this
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 it will be better if
shopping
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the shopping
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 area is
at
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a
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manageable
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 distance. Please keep
this
 request on priority. As you are the most trusted source for me, it will be a great help for me if you can help me to get out of
this
. You can contact
on
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 my cell phone at any time. How are you
my
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 friend? Hope you are doing well. What about Susan and James? It has been a long time since we met. As you know I will move to your city for work after 1 month. I would like to know if you can help me to find out
an
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accommodation. Awaiting
for
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your feedback. Warm regards. Kailash Kamble
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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