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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to preoccupy themselves. Discuss both these views and and give your opinion.

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What would be the best way to use our children's free
time
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, is something that every parent can ask himself. Some may say joining some organization for
group
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 activities, while others may believe that would be more beneficial to let them learn by themselves how to get busy.
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 essay will illustrate both opinions and I will give mine in the end. People who believe that taking part in an organization would be a good idea for children to use their free
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 must have thought about learning how to socialize with others .
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, a
child
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 who has learned how to deal with friends in a
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 setting would be more successful in his life especially when the task required
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teamwork, unlike the other
child
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 who has never been exposed in
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 environment.
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, those who consider that in order for their offspring to use free
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, the
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 has to figure out by himself how to get busy, may support
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 idea with something like creativity.
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,when we look by our self how to get a solution to our own problems, we become more problem solving oriented and become more creative. Unlikewise, if the solution has been given to him,
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 that can create some kind of limitation on the
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. In my opinion, while it is a good idea for children to join a
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 and learn how to socialize, sometimes
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 dynamique may have its own drawbacks
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 as some rules and restrictions established by a
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 can limit a
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 to freely think and come up with new ideas. And
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 can negatively impact his creativity and problem-solving skills. To sum up, some parent believes that children should join some organisation to implement some social skill while others think that they must find by themself what to do on their free
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 to learn problem-solving and being more creative. I believe that the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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