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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
There is an opinion that these days
people
 have a plethora of choices to choose
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 many spheres.Some even argue that humans are exploited with options in life, which are more than sufficient.But I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and the following essay will examine
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why it is extremely significant to have a multitude of alternatives in various aspects. First of all, a variety of foodstuffs, which are available in grocery stores nowadays, cover different
health's
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 requirements of
people
.To put it differently, not everybody can follow the same approach in the diet chart to stay healthy. To illustrate
this
, for a group of
people
, milk products are allergic and they cannot consume those,
whereas
 for most of
us
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 milk is essential since it contains a huge amount of calcium, which is good for bone strength.To compensate
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, the production of soy milk is a positive direction, which has taken the aforementioned crowd into consideration.
Therefore
, it is good to find a replacement wherever possible.
Secondly
, another nuance which contributes to the advantages of multiple options is the fact that children have brilliant opportunities to opt-in
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 establishments to foster their areas of
interests
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.
For instance
, unlike the previous generation,where pupils were forced to study the given syllabus with
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little knowledge
of
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 understanding, whether they were really inquisitive on those subjects, now in many countries, there are humongous streams of education and specialized training is provided.
This
 apparently helps the parents,
as well as
 the children to select the course specific to their goals.
This
 proves how important it is to have resources to pick. In conclusion, the fact, that in recent years the number of options to choose has been drastically increased, is all too familiar nowadays.
While
 some
people
 claim that we have an excessive amount of choices, I completely believe that it is an adequate situation, as it helps to cover all our special requirements.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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