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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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A great number of higher secondary students decide to take a yearlong break to explore or learn before entering into tertiary education. I completely agree with
this
 notion, as it will help them to enhance their knowledge regarding their career, and
also
 they gain
life
 experience. Recently, after schooling, students are deciding to visit places before enrolling themselves in higher studies. The significant reason behind
this
 is to meet many people from different parts of the world to acquire knowledge about various professions.
Similarly
, they can come across many situations which would make them be independent and self-reliant.
Moreover
,
this
 break will help them to de-stress psychologically and physically.
For instance
, a study conducted in
the
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Harvard University concluded that students continuing their tertiary education after a break are 43% more efficient than normal students.
Furthermore
,
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chance
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 will allow them to interact with different characters through which they get many
life related
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 lessons, which in turn make them more mature. Eventually, in their travel
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they get
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pportunity to learn about some specialization and
also
 about the
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 of effort people had put to achieve heights in
life
. All these
,
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 will act as a milestone in students
life
 to channelize themselves properly. Taking these into consideration, in the United States
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some universities made
this
 year gap compulsory for students so that they can learn many good
life
 lessons. In conclusion, taking a break to travel or to obtain work knowledge will certainly be fruitful for individuals before continuing their college studies, because that will show them the career availabilities and
also
 teaches
life
 lessons.
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