You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

#country #study #job #friend #lives #help #plans

Dear Tom, Hope my letter finds you well. I am absolutely delighted to

the

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share the news with you that my scholarship application for PhD

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Texas A & M University has been successful and I am flying to

USA

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the USA

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early

month. Being an overseas student, I will be only doing two courses

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the

first

semester so that I don’t put undue pressure on myself, especially away from my family.

This

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means that I need to attend only two classes each week and free

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of the week. As you know, I’m a homesick person and I would like to engage myself in other activities so that I don’t miss home all the time.

Besides

, I would like to gain some local experience and build up my resume for future opportunities. I was just wondering if you could help me to write an

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resume and provide some suggestions of the recruiters who hire part-time employees. I can’t wait to meet you in person after 5 years and have a whale of a time. Best regards, John

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

181 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Educational aspirations
Work experience
Financial independence
Resume (or CV)
Local job market
International student
Legal requirements
Student work permit
Employment trends
Time management
Networking
A part-time position
Balance studies and work
Job hunting strategies

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