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Some believe in enrolling their children into the best schools so that they learn to socialize while others believe that homeschooling is a better option. Discuss both views and where do you stand on this topic?

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Few believe that sending their children physically to the best
school
 is the best
way
 to know the society well
however
, others believe that home tuitions are the better ways to educate children.
Firstly
, I can say that going to
school
 is the best
way
 because they will explore the world. They will know the society better. Physically going to best
school
 is the better
way
 as it helps to interact with the other individuals which helps them to know what's going on around the world.
This
 enables them with good communication skills, learning ability. Mainly they get interested to listen when they go to
school
 rather than in the computer-based classes.
Also
,they can not only know about their doubts but
also
 they can know other doubts.
Secondly
, I can
also
 say
that home tuitions
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that home tuition
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 are not that efficient because they will lack exploring. They will be bounded to a particular system looking at that and noting down. There will be not much interaction with the professors as compared with going to
school
.
Moreover
, most of the children won't show that interest in online classes. They will be lacking their learning agility which shows
i
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an
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mpact on their learning skills and grasping skills. To summarize, going to
school
 and interacting is the best
way
. But sometimes, like in
this
 pandemic, it is better to have homeschooling itself. But
this
 will lack children's grasping power. So, best schools can help them to socialize and explore new things as much as they can rather than homeschooling.
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