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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What problems does this cause? Can you suggest some solutions to this issue?

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A lot of people these days are striving for
work
-life balance , but only a few of them are successful in capturing it.
This
 is mainly because of improper strategies to
work
 and ,sometimes overtime
work
.There can be various solutions that can be implemented to improve
the
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work
-life balance.
Firstly
,it is considered by many that most of the people have deadlines for their projects which they need to submit owing to which they have to
work
 at home
also
 leading to a reduction in the quality life with their family.
Secondly
, some people earning less remuneration have to
work
 in excess to fulfil their needs .
Moreover
,in several cases
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they have to
work
 as part-time
employ
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 in spite of having
full time
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 jobs.
However
, there are can be
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