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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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People hold different opinions when it comes to pursuing a university education. Some people support a focused plan where students should be allowed to specialize in selected areas
such
 as science and technology while others believe that students should choose subjects they are passionate about. I will discuss both these opinions in the following paragraphs and conclude by presenting my views. Those who believe that student should study a
subject
 of their interest are the staunch supporter of the fact that passion brings out the best in a person. Choosing subjects of their interest will motivate students to excel in their selected field. Indian cricket team would not have got a player like Sachin Tendulkar who is a respected cricketer, had he been forced to study a particular
subject
 rather than following his passion for cricket. So allowing students to opt for their
subject
 of choice becomes crucial for their career. But,
this
 idea has its own disadvantage as many a time a student remains indecisive in selecting a career and end up wasting formative years of his life.
On the other hand
, focusing on subjects which are beneficial in future will provide skilled worker in science and technological field.
This
 will boost innovation in a country, impacting the economy positively.
However
, in long term, there would be a deluge of skilled professional in those fields leading to other issues
such
 as unemployment and low wages.
For instance
, a decade back, the majority of the engineering students graduated with Information technology (IT) degree. Within a few years, the market overflowed with
such
 professional.
As a result
, the wage at entry-level got stagnant, frustrating many of the employees in the IT field. In light of the above arguments, I would support that allowing students to pick a
subject
 of their interest will provide satisfaction to students in long term.
Moreover
, there will be a variety of talent available in future to perform different jobs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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