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SOME THINK THAT CLIMATE CHANGE REFORMS WILL NEGATIVELY AFFECT BUSINESS. OTHERS FEEL THEY ARE AN OPPORTUNITY FOR BUSINESSES. DISCUSS BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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The
weather
 changes always happen on
this
 planet earth, each country has different weathers over the year. Some people think it will
impact
 the current
business
 but some people think it’s a new opportunity to start a new
business
. In my opinion changes in
weather
, the pattern creates new
business
 opportunities
Thus
, both viewpoints are discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, climate changes from
summer
 to either winter or rainy will
impact
 the usage of cotton clothes. People will stop using those and start buying
woolen
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woollen
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 clothes
such
 as sweaters and jackets to protect them from coldness. Same way more
rain
 will
impact
 the
construction
business
 as they were unable to continue their real estate
business
 as the
rain
 is a blocker for them to complete the building or house
construction
. Defiantly the people who do the small
business
 will always
impact
 because of
this
 example like coconut selling shops, soda or cool drinks shops will don’t have a great
business
 in
w inter
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winter
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 or rainy
season
 than
summer
. On the one hand, climate changes from
summer
 to either winter or rainy will
impact
 the usage of cotton clothes. People will stop using those and start buying
woolen
Change the spelling
woollen
show examples
 clothes
such
 as sweaters and jackets to protect them from coldness. Same way more
rain
 will
impact
 the
construction
business
 as they were unable to continue their real estate
business
 as the
rain
 is a blocker for them to complete the building or house
construction
. Defiantly the people who do the small
business
 will always
impact
 because of
this
 example like coconut selling shops, soda or cool drinks shops will don’t have a great
business
 in
w inter
Correct your spelling
winter
show examples
 or rainy
season
 than
summer
.
On the other hand
, climate changes will increase the
business
 for the
business
 people who sell things
accordingly
 and doing some small changes in the appliances.
For example
, the hot
weather
 places always on demand for fans and air coolers. The medicine
business
 people always get benefited based on the
season
 they rotate the medicines for the common diseases which occurs in that
season
. Even coming to the food
business
 always on demand they will change the menu
accordingly
. In conclusion, there are some potential problems because of changes in
weather
 patterns but all human beings need to fight for survival.
Therefore
 people need to change the
business
 plans
accordingly
 to get enough profits and to survive.
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