All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal ? How important it is for a child to learn a foreign language ?

The given line diagram illustrates and compares the student’s immigration to Australia from Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore, in between 1982 to 2000. Overall, overseas students
migration
to Australia
have
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increased during the given time frame. The highest rate of increase in visitors was seen in Indonesians while the least rise in numbers was from Singapore. In terms of the years 1982 to 1986, while
migration
from Hong Kong, Singapore and Indonesia was minuscule, the only significant
migration
was from Malaysia which saw an increase in numbers in 1983 and plateaued
thereafter
at approximately 10,000 students
migration
per year for the
next
7-8 years. Regarding the years from 1986-2000, the number of students coming to Australia from Indonesia gradually rose from around 1,000 per year in 1986 to 10,000 in 1994. And
then
it increased rapidly and peaked at more than 25,000 per year in 1998, before experiencing a slight dip in 1999 and settled
finally
at 23,000 which is the highest amongst all the four countries followed by Singapore, Hong Kong and Malaysia respectively. Visitors from Hong Kong experienced a fluctuation in
migration
rate during the whole period while the number of visitors from Malaysia and Singapore rose gradually and
finally
settled at approximately 19,000.
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