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Appearance is everything. Discuss and give opinion.

#appearance
It is widely argued by some
people
 that how a person looks defines the character,
while
 a few others disagree
to
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 it. In my opinion,
although
 appearance conveys characteristics like confidence, there is an inner beauty, which is more beautiful than being presentable.
Firstly
, a person
who
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i
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I
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 Check the Essay New Essay s well dressed and presents himself smartly to others tends to be more confident than someone who is shabby in
presence
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. Looks boost the personality of
people
 immensely and aid in carrying themselves out very well.
For instance
, in a corporate environment, those members of a company who are to present a demonstration, need to be dressed smartly and executively to create the first impression, as it invariably creates a thought that the person is well prepared.
Thus
, appearance not only enhances personality but
also
 creates a great initial impression.
In contrast
, there are some sections of society
who
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 stand
with
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 the point that, it is not necessary to appear
smartly
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 to others as far as the practice of helping one another is concerned; considering
this
 as a quality of character.
Although
 some
people
 who may not always be well dressed will have an inside beauty that enhances their character. To cite an example, a normal street vendor does not have the opportunity to look posh, wearing old clothes and handing out food freely to those in need as a gesture of humanity, proves
this
 point.
To conclude
, appearance plays a major role in a person’s life-giving confidence,
nevertheless
, it is
also
 important to have a humanitarian mind. As the quote goes, ‘
don’t
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 judge a book by its covers’;
people
 may not seem smart in dressing but may have a heart of gold.
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