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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The rollout of electronic books or online books has diminished the popularity of physical reading materials and may put the purchase of the materials to a halt. There is no doubt that electronic books are getting adopted by more people and it could completely replace the usage of printed newspapers or books. I absolutely agree with
this
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 notion due to the following reason.
First
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 of all, printed platforms are becoming irrelevant day by day as the same
usage
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user

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 can be achieved using online platforms, What makes it easily accessible is due to the fact that almost everyone would have at least a smartphone or a working laptop where they may surf the internet to look for any desired material. The younger generation,
for instance
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, are well-versed through navigating the internet but the elders may prefer the conventional way of reading.
However
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, it is just a matter of time until they are attracted to using a more convenient technology. Since the online platform
are
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is

The plural verb are does not appear to agree with the singular subject the online platform. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 widely available, anyone could gain access to the platform.
Furthermore
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, the production of online materials does not have to bear the raw material
cost
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, marketing
cost
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 and manufacturing
cost
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Thus
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, the
absent
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absence

The word absent doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 of the aforementioned costs enables electronic books and online newspapers to be readily available on websites.
On the other hand
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, physical materials are only available to be purchased at selected stores
with
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at

It appears that the preposition with may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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 a higher price point.
Therefore
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, these
widens
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widen

It appears that the subject pronoun these and the verb widens are not in agreement. Consider changing the verb.

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 the audience including the underprivileged who are able to benefit from the cheaper price of reading materials. To conclude, the abundance of advantages from using materials
in
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on

The preposition in may be incorrect. Consider changing it to another preposition.

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 the internet exceeds the same
of
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apply

It appears that the preposition of may be unnecessary in this context. Consider removing it.

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printed newspapers of books. Internet is rich with information with zero to
l
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the

The noun phrase little cost seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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ittle
cost
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 and comes in handy as it is easily accessible from electronic devices. I certainly agree that the age of holding a book to read
may be
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maybe

The word may be seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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 totally replaced
with holding
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withholding

The word with holding seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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