In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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a lot of
study
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is being done to explore the existence of
life
on planets other than Earth and various governments of different countries are funding a huge amount of finances to do
this
research
.
Although
,
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some people believe that it is crucial to spend the
money
on doing study related to
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xistence of
life
on other heavenly bodies , I disagree with
this
statement because the idea of
life
on other planets is still a
theoratical
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theoretical
concept.
Money
spent on the analysis leads to the stagnant economy and hampers the development of the country.
Firstly
, even today the possibility of
life
on other planets like Mars is an imaginary concept . For more than a century , many nations are spending a huge budget on
research
and launching the expensive satellites in the space. But till today they could not find any hard evidence to support
life
on anywhere else other than Mother Earth .
For instance
,
Although
researchers have been able to find small traces of water on Mars ,
but
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they could not justify the existence of rocks and
non
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non-existance
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existance
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existence
of
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tmosphere which are vital for
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urvival of the human
life
. As a lot of finances are spent on
research
, there are some industrialized nations and many developing countries where people could not afford basic
ameneties
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amenities
of
life
such
as food , shelter .  Due to
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verspending of
money
on
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tudy of space , even the infrastructure of the country is not developed .
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in India, there are many families who are destitute and their kids have to sleep empty stomach every night which leads to
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ajor problem of malnutrition in children .
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according to California Housing Survey ,
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umber of homeless people in San Francisco is increasing at
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ate of 5% every year . To conclude , I believe that
instead
of spending
money
on
research
to find the survival of
life
on other planets ,
Goverment
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Government
should consider the development of
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ation as priority and
money
obtained from taxes, revenue should be spent on building the fine infrastructure of the country as there are tons of people who are deprived of daily necessities of
life
.
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