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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Now a days
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 a lot of
study
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 is being done to explore the existence of
life
 on planets other than Earth and various governments of different countries are funding a huge amount of finances to do
this
research
 .
Although
,
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 some people believe that it is crucial to spend the
money
 on doing study related to
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xistence of
life
 on other heavenly bodies , I disagree with
this
 statement because the idea of
life
 on other planets is still a
theoratical
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theoretical
 concept.
Money
 spent on the analysis leads to the stagnant economy and hampers the development of the country.
Firstly
 , even today the possibility of
life
 on other planets like Mars is an imaginary concept . For more than a century , many nations are spending a huge budget on
research
 and launching the expensive satellites in the space. But till today they could not find any hard evidence to support
life
 on anywhere else other than Mother Earth .
For instance
 ,
Although
 researchers have been able to find small traces of water on Mars ,
but
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they could not justify the existence of rocks and
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existance
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existence
 of
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tmosphere which are vital for
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urvival of the human
life
 . As a lot of finances are spent on
research
 , there are some industrialized nations and many developing countries where people could not afford basic
ameneties
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amenities
 of
life
such
 as food , shelter .  Due to
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verspending of
money
 on
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tudy of space , even the infrastructure of the country is not developed .
For example
 in India, there are many families who are destitute and their kids have to sleep empty stomach every night which leads to
m
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ajor problem of malnutrition in children .
Also
 according to California Housing Survey ,
n
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umber of homeless people in San Francisco is increasing at
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ate of 5% every year . To conclude , I believe that
instead
 of spending
money
 on
research
 to find the survival of
life
 on other planets ,
Goverment
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Government
 should consider the development of
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ation as priority and
money
 obtained from taxes, revenue should be spent on building the fine infrastructure of the country as there are tons of people who are deprived of daily necessities of
life
 .
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