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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Currently, a lot of studies is being done to explore the existence of
life
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 on planets other than Earth and governments of different countries are funding a huge amount of finances to do
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research
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 some people believe that it is crucial to spend the
money
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 on doing study related to the existence of
life
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 on other heavenly bodies , I disagree with
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 statement because the idea of
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 on other planets is still a theoretical concept.
Money
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 spent on the analysis would stagnate the economy as well as hamper the development of the country.
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 , even today the possibility of
life
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 on other planets like Mars is an imaginary concept . For more than a century , many nations are spending a huge budget on
research
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 and launching the expensive satellites in the space. But till today they could not find any hard evidence to support
life
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 on anywhere else other than Mother Earth .
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 researchers have been able to find small traces of water on Mars , they could not justify the existence of rocks and non-existence of the atmosphere which are vital for the survival of the human
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 . As a lot of finances are spent on
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 , there are some industrialized nations and many developing countries where people could not afford the basic amenities of
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 as food , shelter . Due to the overspending of the
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 on the study of space , even the infrastructure of the country is not developed .
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 in India, there are many families who are destitute and their kids have to sleep empty stomach every night which leads to the major problem of malnutrition in children .
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 according to California Housing Survey , the number of homeless people in San Francisco is increasing at the rate of 5% every year . To conclude , I believe that
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 of spending the
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 on
research
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 to find the survival of
life
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 on other planets , the government should consider the development of the nation as a priority and the
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 obtained from taxes, revenue should be spent on building the fine infrastructure of the country as there are tons of people who are deprived of daily necessities of
life
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 .

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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