In many countries, prison is the most common solution for crimes. However, many think that better education is the most effective way to prevent people from committing further crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Crime

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rate is alarmingly increasing in all over the world. In many countries, the most common punishment for

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criminals

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rison. Whereas,

crime

can be prevented

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if people receive adequate

education

and they will understand the consequences they have to face for their criminal activity. I disagree

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statement to a great extend.

To begin

, lack of

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leads to many criminal activities so

instead

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them in a

prison

government should provide them

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education

and make them understand about legal and illegal activities.

Furthermore

, if people have better

education

they know about legislations and they are aware

about

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the outcomes if someone breaks the law.

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, there are specials laws for teenage who do

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rime, as they do not have adequate

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knowledge

so government provide them special counselling and they advise them to take

education

first

rather than putting them

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prison

On the other hand

, when criminals spend years in jail they become stubborn and aggressive.

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etter

education

also

, they will stay criminals because of certain reasons.

Firstly

, when they came out of

prison

everybody

stare

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them with a criminal eye.

Secondly

, after completion of their punishment

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they again come back to their criminal surrounding which

force

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them to do

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rime again and again.

In addition

, some of the major crimes were done by educated people they use their skills to do

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rime. For illustration, the biggest scam in 1992 was done by Harshad Mehta who completed his graduation in business management.

Thus

, sometimes

education

cannot prevent

crime

. In conclusion, there is no denying that good

education

will reduce

crime

but it is evident that once a criminal will always stay a criminal and there is nothing that stops them.

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, in my opinion

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prison

and direct encounter will be the best solution to stop

crime

and stop people

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from

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being criminals.

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3Word repetition
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20Grammar mistakes
 

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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