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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years, it is often suggested that on account of advances in technology, people would not need to meet directly. Personally, I agree that the benefits of
face
 to
face
 communication which involved the role of linking virtual community and real life. In
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ositive effects on it.
To begin
 with, people tend to more keep in touch with neighbourhoods due to the usage growth of cutting-edge gadgets today, whereas some people concern about
worriesome
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worrisome
 situation that the public would rely on
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nly internet conversation, without directly meeting.
In addition
, for youngster shared individual ordinary lives with closest friends, the developed technology has offered
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 positive connection between the online community sites and reality.
For instance
, through the
instagram
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 application, young ones could get information about
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ew trend among their friends, which could prepare many in common for after
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eeting.
Therefore
, the
face
 to
face
 communication will maintain for a while. Aside from that, there is another statement that people prefer to utilize video cheating rather than just voice calls as growing the number of people using
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internet and smartphones.
For instance
, in the real situation for Covid -19, an application as Zooms system (which based on video calls) is gathering plenty of users, it means that people still need to converse with seeing each
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.
Hence
, even if using those products is cope with appointment meeting with others, it is undeniable that people need
face
 to
face
 conversation. In conclusion,
although
 conversation with people in the same place looks like an old-fashioned style,
this
 way is more likely to lead that it would not
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separate
operate
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