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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years, it is often suggested that on account of advances in technology, people would not need to meet directly. Personally, I disagree that the disappearing
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. More importantly, people tend to more keep in touch with neighbourhoods due to the usage growth of cutting-edge gadgets today. Whereas some people concern that the public would rely on
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 communication will maintain for a while. On top of that, another statement is that people prefer to utilize video chatting rather than just voice calls as growing the number of people using
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, in the real situation as Covid -19, an application as Zoom system (which based on video calls) is gathering plenty of users, it means that people still need to converse with seeing each
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 with appointment meeting with others, it is undeniable that people need
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