ou live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear sir or madam I am writing to inform you of my dissatisfaction
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my new
room
in college, which I have to share with another person.
This
new situation gives me some difficulties I cannot do my work perfectly anymore. My roommate is studying music and he is always doing some tasks related to it
such
as practicing guitar all day. Other classmates always gather in our
room
to have practical sessions or handle new projects they are involved with.
While
it is a necessary task for him, he always
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noises by playing his instrument
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I
am not be
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able to concentrate on my work .
On the other
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am always have
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to tolerate their gathering because the
room
is really small and we do not have enough space to have our separate individual privacy. I would prefer to have a private
room
or at least share it with another master's degree student who is in the same condition as me. It definitely could help me to do my best for my final dissertation. I hope that you will address
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for me . Yours faithfully. Ostore hassani.
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task achievement
The description of the situation and problems is clear, but providing more specific examples or details could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
While the letter is generally well-organized, consider breaking up the second paragraph into two separate paragraphs to better differentiate between different problems.
task achievement
You have politely and clearly explained the issue and your preferred solution.
coherence cohesion
Your closing and greeting are appropriate and formal.

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