More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating.

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In recent years, it is often suggested that the individually and collectively public
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to use online communities rather than direct conversation. In
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communication, using science technology progress, in the social
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and personally.
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with, one can see that there is a major drawback of utilizing
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sites to converse between customers and enterprises. For business
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, on account of the online community growth, the conglomerates had committed crimes for productive benefits.
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, those companies would make aggressive advertisements.
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, buyers have to believe
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due to the traits of
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sites.
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, one famous cosmetic brand in Korea as 'the Aritaum',
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company made their cosmetic items by vicious resources to the human's skin.
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, the corporation conducted the frauds to customers, using
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banner advertisements.
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, it is
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communicating on the
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would not occur always positive results.
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benefits
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online communication's functions among individuals.
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because
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these features could link between the virtual communities and the
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for sharing personal information.
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, the Instagram application, users could upload their ordinary pictures or post up to dated trends so that, the neighbours could follow others steps by the exposed various information, which would help to converse in
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, for those reasons, the advances in technology would bring merits influences in the social communities. In conclusion, utilizing the technic progress for communicating,
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demerits effects on
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usiness
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impacts on individual society.
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, it is convincing that the relevant large enterprises should manage to make well-refined advertisements and the public
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should come to a conclusion seriously before purchasing products. If people would maintain
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will occur proper results in order to communicate on the online.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Convenience
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Economical
  • Accessibility
  • Physical barriers
  • Nuanced understanding
  • Impersonal
  • Misunderstandings
  • Reliance
  • Technical failures
  • Vulnerable
  • Security breaches
  • Hacking
  • Data theft
  • Sensitive information
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face interactions
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