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The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend

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These days, there is an ongoing discussion amongst people about the increase in overweight children in western society by almost 20% in the
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 ten years. There are enormous reasons for children becoming overweight. In
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 disturbing trend. There are several causes of the increase in overweight children in western society. One of them is children are dependent on junk
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 or packaged meal.
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, western society generally witness parents who are working full-time and
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 they get very less time to cook their meals. In turn, the children rely on junk
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 like burgers, sandwiches, fires and so on. It should
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 be taken into consideration that the young generation these days are committing more to a sedentary lifestyle. They are less involved in sports activities like playing out-door games, which sums up in burning fewer fats and add weight. Another reason is eating
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 that has
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igh proportion of calories.
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 items like cheese and potatoes have more content of calories which is harmful if taken in excess proportion. The harmful effects of being overweight are of equal importance. Being obese leads to developing health problems like cardiac diseases, high blood pressure, hypertension and many more.
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, people who are overweight feel fatigue quite often and are unable to do more physical activities.
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, their productivity in day-to-day activities declines gradually and children tend to feel demotivated. In conclusion, as mentioned above, there are many causes for being overweight naming, unhealthy eating habits, not involving in physical activities and eating
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 with high calories which ultimately effects in having health hazards, fatigue and lack of motivation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overweight
  • obesity
  • caloric intake
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen time
  • physical education
  • nutritious
  • psychological well-being
  • self-esteem
  • socioeconomic
  • healthcare system
  • life expectancy
  • obesity-related complications
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