Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in this modern world? How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

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and lead a happy and meaningful life ;
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they do not have the same idea how the perfect
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would look like. I think there are three factors that can measure the perfection of the
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in the modern world
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as social value, proper infrastructure and employment opportunities.
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, social value and social bonding among people is a crucial aspect of a perfect
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. In a
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strong bonding and obey
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tend to live a better life.
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is formed with many families if the family members are close and have
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, they would form a better
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good infrastructure and services can be one of the
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of a perfect
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. People need infrastructures and services to
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their urgency.
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, an ideal
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needs sufficient job fields to work in. People can
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their needs by having a good salary for their work and have a good career in future. To conclude, a perfect
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infrastructure and services as well as sufficient job vacancy.
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,
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situation can be built by paying tax, obeying the policy and creating the work fields for entrepreneurs.
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