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It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. how could robots be used in the future? Will this development be a positive or a negative development?

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With the advancement in technology, the invention of robots with artificial intelligence are in demand. It is
also
 forecasted that the presence of robots
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our lives will play a vital role in the future. With
such
 type of mechanical help
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humans would be replaced in a few
work
 fields where there is
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otential risk of life;
however
, I believe
this
 type of progress could bring some adverse effects on dwellers. Robots could help mankind in a number of ways. The
first
 of them is utilising robots in dangerous jobs,
such
 as
fire fighters
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, space exploration and so on.
This
 can not be denied that there has been always a threat to life while working in
such
 fields,
thus
 machines would be preferred over a living being in these professions.
Additionally
, a droid can
work
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 the day tirelessly.
Medical
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 sector is one of the sectors which operates all the time and requires care-takers presence
through out
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 the day.
However
, working for long hours cannot be expected from humans so here machines are beneficial. To illustrate with an example, China had used bots for medical service in the hospitals during COVID-19 pandemic and was able to handle that worst situation effectively. Despite the significant ways a machine is helpful,
this
 development could lead to
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numerous
 severe effects on humankind.To embark with, the most detrimental
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ffect is
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eplacement of humans in non-dangerous professions. Not only a machine can
work
 effectively and
efficently
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efficiently
, but
also
 can take care of
work
that is
 done by many, and
as a result
 lesser requirements of masses and unemployment.
Moreover
, a
driod
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droid
 can be constructive as well as destructive. Usage of them in
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rmy could cause a major issue
that is
 war, and as a consequence human, economy and nature loss. To exemplify, robots could be produced in masses and could be used as weapons for attacking other countries which in result will affect nationals' life and
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ountry's infrastructure. To conclude,
this
 essay highlighted that robots could not only be utilised for life-
threating
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threatening
 jobs but
also
 for long hours and tiring jobs in the future.
This
 essay
also
 elaborated that it is a negative development because it could result
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unemployment and wars.
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