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Some of the people say that all secondary and higher secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with this argument?

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Saving and managing
money
 is one of the dominant skill in life so, most people believe that
this
 skill should be taught to students during secondary and higher secondary schools. I am a strong advocate of
this
 statement, benefits and problems will be covered in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, in current days you can see that most of the teenagers are very much attracted to the modern things and valuable items because they don't have any knowledge about how
money
 is important for their future. Parents can not teach their children about the value of the
money
 because children will get a negative opinion on them and they will start hating them.
Although
, some parents will try to teach their kids most of the children are not gonna listen to them.
Therefore
, it's a good idea to teach them in schools about managing
money
.
Secondly
, most of the children want to buy branded phones like iPhone and branded clothes and shoes to show their status but they need to know that they are spending parents
money
 not there
money
. If they behave like
this
 mostly they will become useless and they will not have any idea to earn
money
 and how to save the
money
 they have the nd of the day they will suffer from many problems. So, it is important to have a lecture on
money
 management in the education system. To conclusion, learning how to manage
money
 will help the young generations to become a good citizen to there country and their family and
also
 they can teach their future kids how not to misuse the
money
 and save the
money
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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