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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 modern era, the digital
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 has changed the way humans communicate.
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, the internet weirdly states that it connects below but we have not thought about how it could separate them as well. Even though it can bring together below across the
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, it still makes people feel lonely and isolates them from their dear ones.I totally agree with the fact and in the discussion below, I would like to highlight the same. In our everyday life, we are so into the hypothetical high society, we do not get to interact with individuals in person. In the recent past, People care more about social media updates by their friends and not their friends.
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, for most of my friends and the society, the happiness quotient in the current day scenario is defined by the number of posts, a number of likes on these post, the "Facebook feed", "Instagram status" .The real-
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, in-person experiences,have been replaced by virtual posts. Communication in person seems to have no value and
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 concept is almost disappearing.
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,In the contemporary
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, it is all about priorities and whom you decide to give importance to considering there's an entire
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 to bond with. To highlight
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how kids and the teenagers feel nowadays, To conclude, the idea of the internet does connect long lost friends and family and can get them closer, keeps friends in the near circle. But in reality,
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 not true. Ever since people started getting used to mobile phones and social media, the whole idea of staying together and closer has failed miserably.
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