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The overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources.

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The major issue faced by the current generation is the increase in
population
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. Advancement in medical technology is the reason for the rise in
population
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. Though, over-
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 its own complication. In my view, the climatic
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 is a far more serious problem than the
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 explosion.
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, improvement in the medical sector has greatly revolutionized the
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arious diagnosis for people to conceive children.
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 recent development includes the introduction of artificial fertilization. Where they give alternative preferences for people suffering from low fertility rate.
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 miscarriage due to
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eak immune system. The medical experts provide alternate solutions
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larming rise in
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opulation grow higher each year which ultimately lead to
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xploitation of resources, I think climatic
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 the most dangerous encounter humanity will ever face. Due to human activities
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the earth’s temperature has greatly raised to
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evel where they affect the climate
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, if the earth’s temperature rises by 1 degree Fahrenheit it is estimated that the glaciers will start melting which ultimately resulting in increasing sea level.
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 leading to flood and tsunami destroying the human
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rowth of
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 leads to exploits resources climatic
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 will greatly affect the human lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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