The office you work in does not have any cafeteria for staff. Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. In your letter, you should tell,     •    what you heard about the inconvenience from the staff     •    how you feel about it     •    what suggestions you have about setting up a cafeteria     •         •    Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir , I am writing
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letter to request you to build a cafeteria area in our office, it will bring pleasant and ecstatic environment at the workplace. I came to know from the staff that lack of cafe caused a problem for some of them because few employees live alone and they don't have time to cook
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, in their lunch break they go to a restaurant which is 3
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away from the office to have their food and
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put adverse impact on their attendance . I feel miserable because
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situation is excruciating as it brings stress and
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our hard-working staff . I would like to give a suggestion that we can construct a small café on the terrace where people can enjoy the view with food .
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will make their life delightful and they become more productive. I hope you will consider my suggestion and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Aarav

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coherence and cohesion
Try to make your points more clear by separating them into short paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one idea. This helps the reader understand your message better.
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Work on improving your tone to be more formal. Use phrases like 'I kindly request' instead of 'I am writing this letter to request'. This shows respect towards your manager.
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You have clearly expressed the need for a cafeteria.
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Your suggestion for the location of the cafeteria is creative and shows good thinking.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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