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The best way for the government to reduce traffic congestion is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally believed that if the government wants to bring down the traffic jams issue, the most effective solution is to deliver free communal
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such
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 as
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 and trains. In my view, I agree with the idea as it does help in loosening up the situation.
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, I believed that free public
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 could reduce
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's dependence on cars and improve the gridlock situation. Those who live outside the city centres tend to travel to work because there are no bus and train stations around the areas.
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, the government should consider building the railway and the bus lane extended enough to cover all remote areas.
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,
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 can be given special lanes to avoid traffic.
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, Japan has done an excellent job in their advanced metro system. Their stations are always teeming and busy, and trains and
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 are always punctual.
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 seldom own a car, and they rely on communal transports.
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, the government should always raise an awareness campaign to promote the advantages of using free public
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. By doing so,
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 can break their mindset of public
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 being dirty, slow and unreliable. As long as more
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 know, the
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 systems are well-designed, more comfortable and convenient;
people
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 will soon start using public
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. In conclusion, I firmly believe free
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 will reduce congestion problem by promoting an awareness campaign and investment in
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 and trains.
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