some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniably true that
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have brought many changes. While some people believe that these
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are causing more troubles than gains, I disagree and believe that the advantages of modern innovations outweigh disadvantages.
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atest technological advancements have changed the way we live, work and interact with our surroundings and it is true to some extent that these are responsible for making our lives more hectic.
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, I feel that more than the innovation itself, it is its end usage which is causing problems.
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, social media phenomenon
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as WhatsApp and Facebook help us stay connected and expand our social circles. But if we don't self regulate
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social media usage and stay invested round the clock, it affects our physical as well as mental well being.
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, the problematic effects of modern
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can be attributed to usage rather than the advancements themselves and can be easily overcome by education and self-regulation.
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, these new discoveries have helped us expand our physical and virtual reach many folds which
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proved very
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in the overall intellectual and academic growth of human beings. As an example, it is now earlier to travel abroad for education and leisure than it was a couple of years ago.
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, innovations
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as digital banking, online shopping etc. have made our routine tasks simpler and faster, leaving us with more time for better activities.
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, new
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have brought big changes in many core professions
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as medicine and education that have positive effects on
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uman race.
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, even though there are some drawbacks associated with modern innovations, the advantages definitely outnumber the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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