Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

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assive amount of money. Personally, I agree with the idea that entertainers

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as actors and athletes earn huge salaries. On the one hand,

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entertaining

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necessary, it is not vital in returns other professionals, teachers and scientists

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my opinion with some examples. A good example here

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ecent year all scientists and medical staff were under a lot of pressure due to the pandemic. Despite, they were exhausted, they have done double duty to tackle the

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issue. The other illustration is teachers who play an essential role in everyone’s life. From

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sychological viewpoint, if teachers are not involved in financial problems, they will focus on education and training which will lead to prepare children to be productive members

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society.

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well-known

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their regular career’s salary.

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, several brands have great contracts with famous entertainers so as to promote their products. These companies use

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hoto of celebrities on eye-catching billboards to draw celeb’s fans attention in order to sell their goods.

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, most famous

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have their own brand.

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, Selena Gomez, as a popular American singer, actress and producer launched her own makeup brand, Rare beauty, in 2020 so that many of her loyal fans to be encouraged to purchase her beauty products. For the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that

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too much. I believe other social professions

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as teacher and medical staffer should be paid higher than celebrities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

Include an introduction and conclusion

It is sometimes said that countries should produce all the food for their populations to eat and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances. What are the causes of this phonomenon and what are the some of possible solution

some believe that government should ban dangerous sports while other argue that there should be freed to do any sports or activity

Many children have unsupervised access to the internet and are using the internet to socialize with others. This can lead to a number of dangerous situations that can be threatening for children. What problems do children face when going online without parental supervision. How can these be tackled

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.