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some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is common in the
society
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 that people do the judgment about an individual’s culture and personality from his or her appearance. Due to some of the psychological facts and despite
of
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the brain complexity, some of the subjective matters would
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 in a
person
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’s choice of
clothes
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. It is agreed that the judgement would be accurate most of the times. As the case of study
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it would be useful to consider both neat and clean garnet and
colorful
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 appearance. Appearing neat and clean in public places could be a sign of a better not only time management but
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 reliability of a citizen. As a clarification, there are two testimonies.
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, an individual with clean
clothes
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, not expensive or luxurious, would plant the seed in the back of audience’s mind that s
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he is a well-timing managed
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, as spent enough time in order to be in
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 situation and good looking.
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, a
person
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 with clean
clothes
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 would make us in our subconscious to consider her
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him as a reliable
person
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 who cares about the vision beauties in public.
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, clean
clothes
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 would show us a
person
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 who not only has a well-managed lifestyle but
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 has a great sense of responsibility about
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society
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. Choosing
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colors
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 and combine them together could be a sign of inner thoughts. As a matter of choosing
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colors
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, in
the
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most of the cultures, black is the
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 uses for funerals and tragic situations.
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, a
person
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 who wears
such
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 a monotone and dark
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 could carry your mind in the way that s
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he most of the times celebrate sadness in his or her mind.
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, people who combining the
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colors
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, mostly the light
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colors
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, shows they are
open minded
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 and happy individuals. To put some more light on the matter, using
colorful
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colors
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 and even accessories clearly
shows
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 that she or he is a happy human being who is
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firstly
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 trying to bring the happiness to the surface of his personality,
secondly
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 attempting to intensify the sense of
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 with nature in the other members of
society
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. In my
view point
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, they are making our public a more dynamic and livable place. All in all, it is acceptable that the appearance of a
person
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 could be a sign of his or her personality and the culture s
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he coming from. We can spread a lot of signals from our inside thoughts and situation to
society
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 by choosing the way of wearing and the
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colors
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 of our
clothes
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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