Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

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argue that celebrities are paid a massive amount of money. Personally, I agree with the idea that entertainers

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as actors and athletes earn huge salaries. On the one hand,

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entertaining

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necessary, it is not vital in returns other professionals, teachers and scientists,

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, have a direct effect on our lives. I would like to elaborate on my opinion with some examples. A good example here is in the recent year all scientists and medical staff were under a lot of pressure due to the pandemic. Despite, they were exhausted, they have done double duty to tackle the Coronavirus issue. The other illustration is teachers who play an essential role in everyone’s life. From a psychological viewpoint, if teachers are not involved in financial problems, they will focus on education and training which will lead to prepare children to be productive members of society.

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, well-known

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have sources of income

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their regular career’s salary.

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, several brands have great contracts with famous entertainers so as to promote their products. These companies use

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hoto of celebrities on eye-catching billboards to draw celeb’s fans attention in order to sell their goods.

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, most famous

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have their own brand.

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, Selena Gomez, as a popular American singer, actress and producer launched her own makeup brand, Rare beauty, in 2020 so that many of her loyal fans to be encouraged to purchase her beauty products. For the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that

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ncome of well-known

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is too much. I believe other social professions

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as teacher and medical staffer should be paid higher than celebrities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

276 words

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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?