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Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Artists play a vital role in the promotion of culture and norm and show a distinctive image of any
country
. Enormous art workers get a mall package so that to keep continue their jobs they need state aid.
This
 essay will fully support the above statement as given some reasons below. Without state support to any institution especially in art and culture field cannot grow as artists need to full fill their family dreams,
such
 public have to travel not only within
Country
also
 they have to visit abroad so travel allowance should be beard by
government
. Because they are on low packages so that they cannot give their children quality and best education, they spend the whole life in keeping other people happy and entertaining.as we often get the news that famous actor is spending his old age in small vintage or house on road. The
government
 should support as they are the ace of
country
 culture as he supported other departments. If the pension system had existed for an artist like
government
 employees,
then
such
 creative people could have bright old days and they did not see
government
 contribution.
Although
 they do not have medical insurance facility so that they cannot treat themselves free of cost but at least they deserve a financial aid to continue his quality and quantity base work. In any
country
 progress and prominent image, the importance of creative persons cannot be neglect as they are entertainer in stress, anxiety and pressure environment. they are hope and encourage unhappy people to live in
this
 tough situation.
Submitted by Urooj Hayat on

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