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Some people prefer one-on-one lessons, while others prefer groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The given line diagram illustrates and compares the figure for
enquiries
 received by the ‘Tourist Information Office’ in a city from
January
 to
June
 in 2011. Overall,
enquiries
 made through telephone calls exceeded
other mode
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another mode
other modes
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 of communication in
January
 while
enquiries
 made in person at the office outnumbered others in
June
. In terms of the
enquiries
 done through ‘telephone calls’ and ‘
in person
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’, both followed more or less similar rising trend during the given time frame. Telephone calls numbered approximately 900 per
month
 in
January
 and reached its highest and peaked at 1600 calls per
month
 in
June
.
Although
 queries ‘in person’ was the least popular in
January
 and stood at approximately 400 per
month
, it rose to 1900 per
month
 at the end of
June
. In regards to
enquiries
 made through letter and emails, it started with just less than 800
enquiries
 per
month
 in
January
 and declined gradually and became the least common mode of contact in
June
 and stood at approximately 400
enquiries
 per
month
.
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