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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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In
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 day and age, shopping from web-stores has been surged substantially, resulting in a decrease in sales in physical-stores.
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, there has been a growing body, in recent years, of opinion in favour of increasing the probability of shutdown of all shopping malls. I,
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, take issue with
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 notion, for I am of the view that without in-store facilities, it is
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 to impossible to buy any product in an urgent basis and to check the coveted quality items. Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that stands out deals with the significance of shops as a source of purchasing things immediately whenever any need arises. To be more precise, there may happen many situations in our lives when we do not have enough time to give an order to online stores since they need at least three to four days for delivering the
products
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. In order to supply
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 on time,
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, physical-shops whether in rural or urban areas will carry on as usual business operation. Another crucial rationale why offline markets will not be closed down is necessarily synonymous with giving the opportunity to touch the
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 before spending on those. Researchers have found that the satisfaction level of purchasing anything is four times higher provided that clienteles shop physically after verifying quality, colour, and price. Admittedly, there are many benefits of online shopping but there are more chances to be deceived by receiving the worst quality or unfit
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. To cite an example, an empirical study conducted by Cambridge University reveals that 90% of American customers
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 see the
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 on online portals,
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 visit physically to their shops. In essence, much as in-store shopping facilitates to buy
products
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 within the desired time and to give mental satisfaction, there is no possibility of closing down of
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 type of shops.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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