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Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try hard and improve such situations* *Discuss both views and give your opinion*

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People
 are divided into two categories, some of them accept their
situation
 even if the current
situation
 is not satisfying their ambitions and others keep working and trying hard to enhance their
situation
.
This
 essay will discuss both views explaining their point of views. In my opinion, I totally believe that we have to not accept any
situation
that is
 not meeting our targets.
To begin
 with, some
people
 are accepting their heinous position and easily surrendering to their
situation
 even if
this
situation
 is not satisfactory or not achieving their minimum requirement.
This
 totally depends on the nature of
people
 that are not ready to fight against the restrictions that he faced which required colossal efforts from guy to improve the current
situation
. Recent research found that around 35 per cent of
people
 are not ready to make their
situation
 better.
Conversely
, there are many
people
 who are not accepting the
situation
 if it is not at their level of acceptance and keep constantly working hard to improve to reach a satisfactory level. Actually, the bad
situation
 encourages them to enhance their
situation
 whatever it takes efforts. BBC News reported that there is 50 per cent of
people
 who achieved their targets but after working very hard.
Therefore
, some
people
 working hard to enhance their
situation
. In Conclusion, accepting a heinous
situation
 from some
people
 is totally not accepted. In my opinion,
people
 should resist any restriction and keep looking to a better environment.
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