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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Some
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guardians
 purchase their
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 excessive count of
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 to play. As the essay will discuss many pros and cons from
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beginners
 having a large number of
toys
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. To initiate,the
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benefits
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ig amount of
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 that they can sharpen their mind. To illustrate it, as in the modern
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 there
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 various kind of plaything and some need
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rain to solve
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 as puzzle and chess.
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, they can become for sharp-minded and they can
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 increase their knowledge.
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 to it, they can
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 their creativeness and level of imagination.
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, it will help them to secure their future. Turning towards drawbacks they will not play outdoor activities. As it will put a negative impact on their health and will slow down their muscles growth as well as bones. As the consequence, they will face many health
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earby future and their height from other children will
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 be lower. To put it in nutshell, there are many advantages of having
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ig amount of
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 but disadvantages cannot be neglected.
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