Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.

In recent years, soft
skills
always
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noticed by many
schools
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conveniences. In my opinion, I choose
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side.
Schools
should concentrate on curriculums,
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tudent could study skill when they have been with their family and friends. I can recognize that it has lots of positive effects when
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tudent just
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academic subjects and pass tests at
schools
.
Students
could focus on their studies so that they would be able to graduate with good qualifications.
Therefore
, it could be easy for them to find
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job with high salary.
Besides
, soft
skills
could be taught at home by their parents and friends. If they studied in
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mall group, they would have comfortable spaces.
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, it could
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elationship with them and their parents or friends.
On the other hand
, I can not deny drawbacks when
students
do not learn soft
skills
. Some
students
who have talents should be taught
skills
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schools
. They could improve their
skills
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uitable job with their talents. If
students
were talented, they would not need very good qualifications to find a job. Some company just focus on what worker could do for them. Some
student
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are
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good at cooking could become and cookers or chefs at
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uxury restaurant. All in all academic subjects and soft
skills
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tudent.
However
, many
students
could not recognize their talent, they should concentrate on learning curriculum and they could find their talent and improve it when they are at home.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic success
  • passing examinations
  • cookery
  • dressmaking
  • woodwork
  • learn from family and friends
  • personalized learning environment
  • supportive learning environment
  • well-rounded education
  • school curriculum
  • resources
  • expert guidance
  • enhance creativity
  • problem-solving
  • teamwork
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