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Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 technology century, many
people
 think that
people
 may live around 100 to 200
years
 by the effort done by scientists and that will be a benefit for
humans
, while others think that will not be a benefit for
humans
. I am on the belief that
this
 science not necessary in the future and I disagree with that view. I will discuss both views and give my opinion in
this
 essay. On the one hand, some nation agree with the view of that science will make a
community
 live up to 100 or even 200
years
; the new technology will develop medical sciences to give the
community
 the chance to live longer than now. A good example will be clear in developed countries
such
 as Germany when the medical system there excellent for their citizens and that clear in the numbers of older
people
.
Finally
, many
people
 believe that will be great for a human to live for many
years
 over 100
years
.
On the other hand
, others not with
this
 view because that will increase the number of senior citizens and these
people
 in
this
 age, their productivity will decrease a lot and they will cost the countries higher than now.
For instance
, there many areas in China famous by the older
people
 in the Earth, and that clear to see how they live and see what they make. To summary ,
people
 disagree with that idea when the
community
 will live over than what they live now because of the cost of living. In conclusion, I believe that
community
 who will live over 100
years
 not the great idea and
humans
 could use science to make
community
 in a healthy life. That while many think that positive for
humans
, others think that negative.
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