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Some people believe that governments should ban dangerous sports. Others claim that they should have freedom to choose their favourite activities. Discuss both views and present your opinion.

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It is believed that governments play a role in protecting
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's lives by prohibiting extreme
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, while others think that it should be one's choice whether to take part in them or not. I agree with the latter view;
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 provide a conclusion. On the one hand, a lot of
people
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 opine that governments should ban these dangerous
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 even if a lot of individuals seem to enjoy them.
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 is because these activities can impose grave health risks to participants' lives; they can suffer from debilitating injuries,
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, it can cause death.
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, a recent study has shown that skiing caused many spine injuries that lead to paralysis.
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, many
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 have called for outlawing these
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 because of the hazards and the consequences associated with them. 
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, it is argued that
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 should be free to choose whatever activity they want to do without any interference from authorities. The main reason is that each individual should be responsible and held accountable for his or her actions. As well as
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, it is not accepted that governments interfere in
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's choices, as
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 constitutes a major breach of privacy.
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, recently, a survey has shown that over 50% of
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 do not like being restricted and limited in their options. As a consequence, passing laws to prohibit extreme
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 may not be satisfactory for some individuals. In conclusion,
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 dangerous games can cause serious physical damages to those who participate in them, they should not be banned because
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 should choose and decide based on their inclinations.
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