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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, it is irrefutable that the advent of
technology
 has transformed the way
people
 communicate with each other.
Although
 high-
technology
 bring lots of positive effects, I would argue that they
also
 have some drawbacks. On the one hand, there
are
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 a myriad of benefits of using the
technology
.
Firstly
, the Internet not only
connect
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connects
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 with some new friends
,
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 but
also
 help us to reconnect with former relationships.
For instance
, services like Facebook, Twitter usually suggest some
people
 you may know,
therefore
, that could allow us to interact with
people
 from overall the world.
Secondly
, using
technology
such
 as smartphones or computers would enable the introverts who prefer
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ommunicate through the computers to meeting
face
 to
face
 with others.
Finally
,
technology
help
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 the business, education more convenient and easier, only with a click of a mouse, they can take a meeting easily with their partners.
On the other hand
,
the
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high-
technology
also
 have some negative impacts
for
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people
. As the development of the technique,
people
 would depend on social networks without
face
 to
face
 meetings.
For example
, teenagers tend to stick their eyes on the screens with their friends rather than have a conversation in the real life.
In other words
, it is undeniable that the social media are unsafe, some issues as “Cyberbullying” has prevailed for a long time, which make
people
to
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face
 up with the problem with their mental. To conclude, while
technology
have
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 a lot of benefits, I would argue that the development of them would contribute to some negative effects
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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