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Some people do not mind to spend their leisure time with their colleagues while some people prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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The idea of spending free
time
 with co-workers has always been a subject of debate. There are some
people
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njoy spending their leisure
time
 with their colleagues, whereas there are other
people
 like to keep their private
life
 separate from their official
work
life
.
Although
 arguments on both sides are worth exploring, I firmly believe that having
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ersonal
life
 is more preferable but
this
 idea
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the
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certain reasons
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 debate. On one hand, some
people
 prefer to
hangout
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 with their colleagues after
work
 or on the weekend. They rather
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 to spend their free
time
 with
people
 from
work
instead
 of spending more
time
 with friends or family in their
life
 out of
work
. If it works well, it could be a great opportunity to raise the teamwork by being familiar with
people
 at
work
 and
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reat chance to get promotion prospect.
On the other hand
, there are those who prefer to enjoy their own
time
 apart from the
work
. It is commonly observed that many
people
 feel more stressful due to the pressure of being closer with their seniors even though they do not want to.
However
, it is obvious that it is simply not necessary to be familiar with co-workers unrelated to
work
.
Moreover
, it probably makes them feel like a
longer
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 day at
work
.
Finally
, given the choice between the two, I strongly believe that keeping private
life
 apart from
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ob without any possible way to engage in
work
 is more beneficial than the opposite side. By doing so,
work
 efficiency will be more productive and get more energetic because of the better
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life
 balance.
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