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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It is undeniable that housing is one of the basic needs
for
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 humans. Up until
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resent, there is a debate in some countries whether owning a home is more cost-effective than renting one. After thorough consideration, spending
money
 on buying a
house
 rather than renting can be counted as a profitable investment.
This
 issue will be examined in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, rental fees are wasteful of
money
. Once it is paid, a person will not get anything in return except
an
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accommodation for that period of time. That amount of
money
, perhaps, should be saved for other future emergencies rather than wasting it away.
Moreover
, people who rent a
house
 have to continuously spare their salary on the rental fee every month without knowing when to stop. Because once they stop or cannot afford the fee anymore, they will not have a place to be sheltered in.
In addition
, renting a
house
 is just a temporary condition and can be terminated anytime.
Although
 under the law, the landlord needs to inform their residents a couple of months in advance before
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 the contract, the residents will barely find a new decent housing under that time pressure. To make my suggestion clearer, the sense of ownership is long-lasting. Even though making the
house
 payment is significantly a huge amount of
money
, after all, the
money
 that the buyer puts in doesn’t go anywhere. Even if their salary is not enough to cover the whole
house
installment
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, getting a
house
 loan is not always a bad idea. With all the interest rates on the loan, it still worths the effort. As the price of land is getting higher year by year, the
house
 owner will definitely make some profit out of selling their
house
. All in all, I’m strongly convinced that owning
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housing is absolutely more beneficial in both terms of cost and convenience. 316 words
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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